Turn down the lights
Please pour the wine
The show is delightful tonight
The star is dressed up
Her shoes and hair shine
And she’s a devilishly beautiful sight
The stage is all set
With dishes and props
And a net in case you should fall
The music queues up
The feast melts in your mouth
You feel sure you’ve died after all
The spotlight blots out
All the trouble backstage
While the dancing completely distracts
The star juggles lies
And swirls her disguise
And is convinced we’re entranced by her act.
~ cj 2011.08.02
Love all your poems, because they come from your heart. Your post said it was a work in progress, but I can’t really see what needs to be improved. Not great with constructive criticism, am I? In other words, I don’t know that my comments help, but I’m here.
Wow. I have can’t quite put my finger on this. This word-smithing is beyond my art. Good on you for going there. Fascinating to watch. Keep going.
Enjoyed every bit of your blog.Really looking forward to read more. Great.