| When I find you we won’t be lonely anymore. We’ll cuddle close, We’ll walk through woods, We’ll be adored We’ll stop searching. We’ll travel well. And we won’t be lonely anymore. |
When I find me I’ll cuddle close, I’ll walk through woods, I’ll be adored I’ll stop searching. I’ll travel well. And I won’t be lonely anymore. |
~ cj 2011.07.28
I put it in two columns. Which comes first? Finding myself? Or finding you. Maybe the truth is that I find myself through you. Or maybe I find you because I’ve found myself.
I think this should be two separate poems. One titled When I Find You…one titled When I Find Me. What do you think?
Not bad. Either way you go, combined or separate, they read as they were intended to sound, (I believe). Keep em coming. Dont let that fire die. EVER
Thank you so much Chris, for taking the time to read this and write something. 🙂
You know how they say you have to love yourself before you can love another? I found it interesting that you chose (in the poem) to find you at the end. Either way, I love the poem, and hope you find whatever, or whoever, you need not to be lonely anymore.
Or maybe it means we try first to find ourselves in another, then realize, we have to find ourselves. This was such fun to think about.
Oops! Didn’t see your comment before I typed mine. Don’t know about two poems that are nearly identical. I think one. Just my opinion.
I’m loving the juxtaposition of trying to decipher which comes first .. and I love that the side by side leaves the answer to that question to the reader.
As to finding myself? I’m still looking.
Aren’t we all. 🙂
I like them as one poem. If you haven’t found yourself, how can you find someone else that will actually fit the poem? I guess there are some people who are truely happy just being part of a relationship and they ‘are’ whoever or whatever the other person wants. However, you do not strike me as that person. I suppose it’s also possible that the person will facilitate the process of finding yourself. However, you are pretty much stuck with yourself so if you don’t want to be lonely anymore I would bet on yourself. (Not sure if that all made sense).
Thanx for reading this, Donna! It totally made sense. 🙂
Really good! The reason it works is the side by side arranGent. This could be a nice piece of art with the right backdrop
What a great compliment, Amy! A friend of mine recently showed me the stuff you need to do acrylic painting…she forgot to teach me how to paint though! 🙂
Thanx for reading this.
That really resonated with me. Thanks for a little mid-day inspiration.
Thanx for reading it, Susanna. 🙂
it is perfect as is. Leave it in two columns in the exact order it’s in. The poetic power comes in the echo back and forth between the two worlds, inner and outer, and the truth of the inner anchors the insights about the outer. This is also the way of manifestation. The truth begins to flower within and ultimately manifests in the outer world as a reflection of what lives in the inner.
Trust your artist more CJ. You got it right but then your self doubt kicked in. Feel the beauty in it. You know. You really do. Just trust yourself. 🙂
I wasn’t really feeling self doubt exactly. I was just reflecting out loud that truly it could go either way. Sometimes we find ourselves through another, and sometimes we find another because we’ve found ourselves. 🙂 I CERTAINLY found myself through knowing you. Thank you so much for reading this. And thank you as always for your kindness.
This is amazing. It should be one poem and I love that finding me was second. When reading the first part, I thought nice little poem about love. But then seeing the second part completes the message. After reading, I am left with, does she mean simply that one cannot truly love without knowing and loving oneself, or is this a bit of sarcasm. I loved it!
Everybody else has already articulated the cool thoughts.
I like the parallel arrangement, the outer and the inner view, the we and the I.
The Questions posed by which comes first, does it matter are left to the viewer.
As always, thought and emotion provoking.
Love your writing and exploration, and inviting us along.